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Audio; 4/1
[ooc: this is forward dated to April 1st, so newbies feel free to come back and tag in once the intro log goes up and the gates are officially open!]
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[Audio]
[It sure has been a good while since Peridot has addressed a message to the whole crew… And as it turns out, she’s not intentionally breaking that silence.
Recently, she has been fiddling with the tech built into her limb enhancers, and with her MID, in order to facilitate a proper exchange of data between the two. Synchronization. Efficiency. Music to her little space rock ears.
It’s about to bite her in the ass.
It’s just a regular afternoon like any other when the message goes up, and it’s quickly obvious that the contents were not exactly meant for the public eye.]
Log date, 855...
Since receiving a surprise delivery last month containing the completed works of the horrible, enrapturing human entertainment drivel known as “Camp Pining Hearts”, I have subjected myself to no fewer than eight watches of the series in its exhaustive entirety. Last night as of 18:00 hours SST marked the end of my most recent endeavor. And yet, still, I cannot possibly even begin to grasp how the human CLODS who wrote this cruddy dirt-heap of a story, could possibly deny the obviously SUPERIOR romantic match, that is PERCY AND PIERRE!
[She pauses briefly to collect herself, inhaling deeply.]
I could expound further upon this, but seeing as I have dedicated my last three entries to the topic, I am opting to take a different approach this time. Following the suggestion of a fellow crew member, I have been considering potential “re writes”, so to speak, of catalyst plot moments throughout the CPH saga. Corrections to the writing that actually work with the vast amounts of subtext supporting the one true romantic pairing of Percy and Pierre, which will ultimately result in the two of them dominating each other’s hearts, the camp, and eventually, the world.
[Peridot clears her throat before getting right into it.]
Potential scenario number one: Camp Clod decides to hold an intensely competitive camp-wide game of the human sport known as “capture the flag”. Rather than playing by the standard rules, this game has the campers split up into four color coded, even-numbered teams of players. Needless to say, our two main characters are both members of the yellow team, alongside several C-list extras who will serve to move some of the action of the game along in the background. The devious blue team lead by none other than the treacherous witch Paulette has already stacked the odds in their favor by planting their flag in the most diabolical, impossible to reach location in the entire camp: THE BOTTOM. OF THE LAKE.
Of course what the blue team fails to consider is that the lake is impossible to reach for all but one: Percy, with his indomitable lung capacity, volunteers to take the dive and capture the blue team’s flag, in order to secure victory for his beloved yellow team.
BUT: Conflict arises when Percy encounters trouble underwater: A trap, set by the enemy team for the purpose of protecting their flag, goes horribly awry and puts Percy in mortal danger. Even he cannot indefinitely withstand the crushing pressure of several tons of lake water. But then, just when all hope seems lost, Pierre boldly dives into the depths to rescue his imperiled teammate, pulling him back to the surface in the embrace of his powerfully muscular arms. The pair make it back to the beach, BUT! Percy is still not breathing. There’s only one thing for Pierre to do: He must perform the CPR--
[She’s distracted mid-tirade by a beeping sound from her MID. That’s when she notices that it has been recording and broadcasting literally everything she’s been saying to the entire damn ship.
A horrible strangled yowl erupts, and then the message cutes off.]
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[VIDEO, several hours later]
[When Peridot comes back, she looks disturbingly blank faced, but there’s a horrible fire burning just behind her eyes as she stares into the tiny wrist-mounted camera. After a moment she speaks:]
If any of you dare to mention ANYTHING. About what you may or may not have heard earlier. I’ll... I'll... Nnngaahhh, I DON’T KNOW WHAT I’LL DO EXACTLY, BUT I PROMISE, I WILL MAKE YOU REGRET IT!!! PERIDOT, OUT!
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[Audio]
[It sure has been a good while since Peridot has addressed a message to the whole crew… And as it turns out, she’s not intentionally breaking that silence.
Recently, she has been fiddling with the tech built into her limb enhancers, and with her MID, in order to facilitate a proper exchange of data between the two. Synchronization. Efficiency. Music to her little space rock ears.
It’s about to bite her in the ass.
It’s just a regular afternoon like any other when the message goes up, and it’s quickly obvious that the contents were not exactly meant for the public eye.]
Log date, 855...
Since receiving a surprise delivery last month containing the completed works of the horrible, enrapturing human entertainment drivel known as “Camp Pining Hearts”, I have subjected myself to no fewer than eight watches of the series in its exhaustive entirety. Last night as of 18:00 hours SST marked the end of my most recent endeavor. And yet, still, I cannot possibly even begin to grasp how the human CLODS who wrote this cruddy dirt-heap of a story, could possibly deny the obviously SUPERIOR romantic match, that is PERCY AND PIERRE!
[She pauses briefly to collect herself, inhaling deeply.]
I could expound further upon this, but seeing as I have dedicated my last three entries to the topic, I am opting to take a different approach this time. Following the suggestion of a fellow crew member, I have been considering potential “re writes”, so to speak, of catalyst plot moments throughout the CPH saga. Corrections to the writing that actually work with the vast amounts of subtext supporting the one true romantic pairing of Percy and Pierre, which will ultimately result in the two of them dominating each other’s hearts, the camp, and eventually, the world.
[Peridot clears her throat before getting right into it.]
Potential scenario number one: Camp Clod decides to hold an intensely competitive camp-wide game of the human sport known as “capture the flag”. Rather than playing by the standard rules, this game has the campers split up into four color coded, even-numbered teams of players. Needless to say, our two main characters are both members of the yellow team, alongside several C-list extras who will serve to move some of the action of the game along in the background. The devious blue team lead by none other than the treacherous witch Paulette has already stacked the odds in their favor by planting their flag in the most diabolical, impossible to reach location in the entire camp: THE BOTTOM. OF THE LAKE.
Of course what the blue team fails to consider is that the lake is impossible to reach for all but one: Percy, with his indomitable lung capacity, volunteers to take the dive and capture the blue team’s flag, in order to secure victory for his beloved yellow team.
BUT: Conflict arises when Percy encounters trouble underwater: A trap, set by the enemy team for the purpose of protecting their flag, goes horribly awry and puts Percy in mortal danger. Even he cannot indefinitely withstand the crushing pressure of several tons of lake water. But then, just when all hope seems lost, Pierre boldly dives into the depths to rescue his imperiled teammate, pulling him back to the surface in the embrace of his powerfully muscular arms. The pair make it back to the beach, BUT! Percy is still not breathing. There’s only one thing for Pierre to do: He must perform the CPR--
[She’s distracted mid-tirade by a beeping sound from her MID. That’s when she notices that it has been recording and broadcasting literally everything she’s been saying to the entire damn ship.
A horrible strangled yowl erupts, and then the message cutes off.]
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[VIDEO, several hours later]
[When Peridot comes back, she looks disturbingly blank faced, but there’s a horrible fire burning just behind her eyes as she stares into the tiny wrist-mounted camera. After a moment she speaks:]
If any of you dare to mention ANYTHING. About what you may or may not have heard earlier. I’ll... I'll... Nnngaahhh, I DON’T KNOW WHAT I’LL DO EXACTLY, BUT I PROMISE, I WILL MAKE YOU REGRET IT!!! PERIDOT, OUT!
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Starflight looks a little bemused when he replies, politely not mentioning the blunder.]
That premise isn't bad but there are some pretty glaring problems with using drowning as the main plot point. How did the blue team set up the trap if Percy was the only one who could dive deep enough to reclaim the flag? How could Pierre reach Percy underwater? What's CPR? That's a lot of unnecessary questions you'd have to explain to keep the story plausible.
[ He's not an expert or a professional by any means, but Starflight does consider himself pretty well versed in stories and has even written a few things himself. He feels pretty qualified to give his roommate some pointers. ]
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She's going full deviantARTist on this shit. DEFENSIVE SPLUTTERING: GO!]
That isn't-- I mean, I wasn't... THESE WERE JUST NOTES FOR MYSELF, all you've heard is a basic summary! I just hadn't gotten into all of the details yet, you clod! And obviously you fail to grasp that there are ways to get a flag underwater without actually swimming it down there. All the blue team would have to do is take a "canoe" out to the middle of the lake, attach something heavy to the flag, and drop it in! Gravity and fluid dynamics do the rest!
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...Of course that does raise the issue of inadvertently implying that the blue team would be clever enough to figure out such a thing in the first place. Hm...
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Wouldn't it be more interesting if they were equals though, or if the blue team had the advantage? It would make it more of a challenge, and raise the stakes in the competition. Winning against unlikely odds. [ Those were some of Starflight's favorite stories.]
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No. I don't really want to give the blue team that kind of credit, frankly.
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My premise is fine, I... I just need to tweak a few details, that's all!
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Well if you ever have a finished draft and want someone to read it over, I could help.